C 12
Dear Patti,
Nowadays, Chinese is holding a very big popularity all over the world, and I am very pleased that you want to learn Chinese, too. The best way to mention is to learn from the program called Learning Chinese on CCTV 9. Being the international channel, you can watch it 09:15 or 15:15 easily every Tuesday to Saturday. Made by the Canadian Da Shan, he is knowledgeable enough to follow with his adequate learning experience about Chinese. The Communicate in Chinese, Travel in Chinese and Sports in Chinese are the contents the program includes.
What it attracts me is that it can be learned or understood easily and express the Chinese culture vividly.（10）
内容表达到位，但有些地方语言表达欠通顺，有几处语法错误。
Resources saving
This is story about the sight of the running water. Mary turned it off while Peter walked away regardless of it.
Needless to say, Peter is to blame for he neglected the resources wasting. The similar behavior became the hot topic nowadays, that is the resources saving. With the limited resources, running out it is our obligation to save it and protect our earth.
Take the examples of my friend as a vivid illustration. Some of them forgot to turn off the light when no one was in the classroom, some of them waste the food in the canteen and so on. All of those are the least things to be followed.
Damaged by our mankind severely, the earth is losing its capability to serve us, it is high time that we took it seriously and protected our world. (21)
结构合理，多处运用了高级词汇和句型。各别地方需要更换词的用法。
C13
Dear Patti,
Nowadays, Chinese is holding a very big popularity all over the world, and I am very pleased that you want to learn Chinese, too. I know a program named Learning Chinese, is on board at 9:15 and 15:15. It is on CCTV 9, an international Channel, which is convenient for you. The instructor is named Da Shan, who is a Canadian and has a rich experience in learning Chinese. Moreover, communicate Chinese, Tourist Chinese are included and Sport Chinese will be involved in 08 Olympic Games. Dashan has made it easy to learn and understand in interesting way so you could gain more knowledge about China Culture. (9)
表达欠流畅，有些词的用法不够贴切。很多信息点应该分开来写。
Habbits reflect sence
Peter ignored a running water tap while Mary turned it off quickly. They also have different opinion about this that distinct their sence.
After reading the story, I really think highly of the little girl Mary who has a public sence. Although the running tap was not left by her. She turned it off quickly to save water. She does know the water is precious as oil. From her, I could see the hope of our society . So I appreciate the girl named Mary.
Moreover, I could see some little children pick up plastics water bottle and throw it into rubbish box in parks when they have a walk with their family. A big smile in my face but also in my heart.
In my opinion, a good habbit reflects a good sence. A good habbit should be picked up from a childhood . So , parents and society should pay more attention to children so they could set a good habbit.(19)
观点明确，思路清晰，各别地方有语法错误。
责任编辑：李芳芳