2009年深圳一模英语优秀作文
基础写作
Here, I am recommending the program named Learning Chinese on Channel 9, which is international and convenient to watch. And it is on TV at 9:15 and at 15:15 except Monday and Sunday every week. Besides, the program contains 3 parts: communcative Chinese, traveller Chinese and Athletic Chinese. However, referring to the entire program, I am most impressed by the host, Dashan, who is a canadian with rich experience of learning Chinese. Lastly, I intensely advice you to watch this program due to its easyness and vividness, and if so, I am convinced you will soon get to know Chinese cultures much better.
优点：语言规范，精炼。句式灵活丰富且恰到好处，能运用较高级的词汇：如句中的I am recommending；referring to; I am convinced.
不足：个别翻译表达错误，如Communicative Chinese; Athletic Chinese；个别用词不当，如最后一句谓语应用动词advise而不能用名词advice。
得分：13
读写任务
Begin With the Simplist Things
Facing the water running for nothing, Peter chose to ignore it while Mary took a quick action to turn it off, feeling disappointed at Peter’s behaviour.
Mary is well deserved to be praised for her behavior. Everyone should make his or her attempt to save our limitted resources.
Similar things happened in my campus. Amy is always the one who leaves the classroom at last. As a girl who cares much for our resources, she never forget to turn off the lights for three years. What’s more, in many cases she helps to turn off the lights of other classrooms.
Nothing can be more simple than turning off the lights when you leaves, but it really counts. We’re calling for saving, but for most of us, to say is one thing and to do is another thing. So try to save resources,beginning with simply things.
得分：21
点评：能围绕主题展开来写，文章的结构简洁合理，句与句之间语意连贯，自然流畅。
但在某句中没注意运用正确的时态。
责任编辑：李芳芳